First draft of my short film

 

This is the first draft of my A2 media short film. There are a few changes that I would like to change to the film before it is finished. These changes have been influenced by the feedback that I have received from target audience. The biggest change that I want to make is the end graveyard scene. I feel as though the scene doesn't really work well and it isn't clear to the audience what is happening in the scene. I feel as though it doesn't look realistic enough to create the effect on the audience that I would like, so it needs to be re-filmed.
To improve it I think that filming it in an actual graveyard will add to the scene and make it more clear, and if the friends are putting the flowers down at an actual grave it will make it more emotional because it will be more believable.
Another change that I want to make is that I want to change the music that I have used for the beginning and middle parts of the film. I don't feel as though it fits the storyline well and when I asked my audience for feedback, they agreed with me and said that it would be better if different music was used.